Monday, March 5, 2012

Rachael Harrie's Second Campaigner Challenge (for the Fourth Campaign)

I'm back for Rachel Harrie's Second Campaigner Challenge of her Fourth Campaign. There are a number of ways a writer could enter this challenge and this is what I chose to do: Write a story/poem in five sentences, each sentence based on one of the prompts.  The dystopian theme reflects a genre I don't currently write in. Although the task I chose didn't come with a word count limit, I challenged myself further by making this five-sentence flash fiction piece 200 words.

You can read all the entries by clicking here. Feel free to “like” my story on Rachael’s Linky List- I am #35. 
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THE ENDING AND THE PROLOGUE
Weeks after the nuclear thundershower of meteorites hit, Aiden and Evelyn cuddled beneath the remainder of the bridge, their backs against a column left standing, and they realized it wasn’t so bad having a gash on a leg and a torrent of muddy water rain down on one of their heads.

Thunder sounded in the black sky before signs came for the two sole survivors: lightning flashed, its design twisted like fluorescent wire so it looked like a star or cross, and then a seagull cawed three times, commanding new life. 
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“I can’t imagine children surviving here,” Aiden said, holding Evelyn’s smooth hand as he surveyed the barren landscape, its greenery and livestock and people all gone.
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“This morning, I dreamt of a boy with your eyes playing on a bridge overlooking clean water,” Evelyn whispered in his ear.
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Fortunately, the two came from good gene pools so though he was a mathlete, and she, a star gymnast, their kisses easily escalated into the release of tension they kept bottled up inside since the day the first meteorite, resembling a frosted pear, plummeted from the sky onto their biology teacher’s spoon, his limbs and body bursting into smithereens seconds later. 

 
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33 comments:

S.P. Bowers said...

Loved that it landed on the biology teacher's spoon.

Cynthia said...

Thanks, S.P.! I wanted to stick to the details in the images.

Ashley Nixon said...

You pulled everything together nicely! And you stuck to the images very well! Great job! :)

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Ashley!

Morgan said...

Oooo... Nice work! Way to connect everything! Very fun :D

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Morgan!

Kevin Hiatt said...

Wow, sucks to be that science teacher. I liked your use of the prompts, using all of them like that was infinitely harder than what I did, I don't think I could have pulled it off as well.

Kevin (#19)

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Kevin! It was also challenging for me to cram all that info into five sentences. =)

Sarah Pearson said...

That was certainly an unexpected last line!

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Sarah!

sue said...

lol loved the humour - and interesting take on the prompts
#48

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Sue!

Laurie Dennison said...

I really like how you used all the prompts. Great job!

Nick Wilford said...

By the end, I'd forgotten it was only five sentences. So much packed in! I would like to know more of the story, it was done with a light touch despite the heavy subject matter. Fun to read.

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Laurie!

It was definitely a challenge to pack all the info into 5 sentences, Nick. I'm glad you thought it was fun to read.

Melissa said...

I think your last sentence took half the word count. Very original. ; )
Melissa Maygrove #14

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Melissa!

Sher A. Hart said...

Yours is the first 5 sentence story I've seen. Really interesting the way you wove it into such a neat package. Not counting the biology teacher bursting, of course; he was a mess. Morbid joke.

Also cool how the names are similar to Adam and Eve. Good job!

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Sher! You are the first person to comment on the names being similar to Adam and Eve- that was what I'd intended, and I'm glad someone noticed!!

Mark Koopmans said...

Aloha Cynthia,

You don't have to believe me, but I was going through a bunch of blogs today, and I saw yours and I was like "oh, *that's* a cool name for a blog :)

Thanks for your comments. I'm a new follower, too :)

Honey said...

Great take on the prompts! Quite challenging to put it all in 5 sentences too, but you had a complete picture made out with your words:)

Cynthia said...

Mark, you're welcome! Thanks for the follow!

Honey, thanks for checking out my story!

Cortney Pearson said...

Nice imagery! I enjoyed this. :)

Cynthia said...

Thanks, Cortney!

C.M.Brown said...

Great job packing all that story into only 5 sentences! Well done!

Cynthia said...

Thanks, C.M.!

laurenwaters.net said...

Cynthia, you've been tagged on my blog :)

David P. King said...

Nice one, Cynthia! Fitting the way you described their kissing. :)

Cynthia said...

Thanks, David!

Jennifer said...

Gorgeous and love that you utilized all the imagery in it. You have my vote! And always glad to meet a fellow baked good lover. :-) I am always happy to send recipes your way. Good luck this round!

Traci Kenworth said...

Nice story!!

Cynthia said...

Jennifer, thanks for the vote!

Traci, thanks!

Claire L. Fishback said...

This is awesome. I LOVE that the meteorite landed on the spoon. Crazy cool.

I was too late to enter my story, but it is here, if you'd care to take a peek?

http://www.clairelfishback.blogspot.com/2012/03/boy-on-bridge.html

Claire

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